Wednesday, October 29, 2014

Thinking Toward a Revision Plan


I am solid about the issue, and how to address it. I am solid about my audience and on my argument. Also, I am solid on my sources, and how they support my thesis. I am not so solid yet on my closing, but I am working on it.
My argument states that most academically successful children have solid hard and soft skills and few social and emotional stresses. Solid hard and soft skills, fewer emotional stresses result from playtime. Therefore, academically successful children result from playtime. There are at least four sources that support my claim. I have included two other sources that counter the necessity of play during school hours but do not take in consideration my point of view. To make sure that my readers understand the purpose of each paragraph, I’ve included the thesis on my introduction and argued each point respectively on the paragraphs.
I believe that my essay will engage readers, because not many people perceived the importance of play. Many people have the assumption that play is a privilege or a form of entertainment. My introduction engages readers with my argument and address initial concerns and my transitions help readers move from one paragraph to the next.  I am working on my conclusion sum up my argument and end memorably for readers.

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